Haibun Thinking: Well, Did You?


Haibun Thinking is a weekly challenge to write a Haibun. This weeks challenge can be found here – Haibun Thinking 
Golly, did I hear you say you would be free if you could?

Gussy the Goose, Charlotte’s Web (2006)

Did you hear me cry out in the night? As you loved me did you hear me cry out.
Did you feel me kiss you in your sleep? After you turned out the light did you feel my kiss.
Or was it a dream after we fought so hard to be the one in the right and not seeing the hurt in a lover’s eyes. Two stubborn minds and two thinking rights making the wrong. The heat of the argument drove your words to the moment you said you wished you and I were no longer us. And then I sat stunned on the floor as if you had hit me and I wished you had as it would have hurt less. In that moment you shattered my heart.

Fury and words
the acts of betrayal
caught in heartbreak

© JG Farmer 2014

About Jez Farmer

I am a freelance writer and poet and started writing after raising my two boys as a way of discovering just who Jez is. That is still very much an on-going project but the journey so far has introduced me to many wonderful friends and fellow writers through an ever growing love of poetry.
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2 Responses to Haibun Thinking: Well, Did You?

  1. Very well written haibun Jeremy, you caught the anger and frustration of the moment very well. Very engaging piece.

  2. Al says:

    Words said in anger can be so destructive and they stay forever. Always there. Maybe forgiven, but never forgotten and always worried that the same situation will occur. Well written Jeremy. Thanks

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