Love Haibun


I like to keep my promises and I promised Al I would give his Haibun challenge a go. Not sure I have got it right mate but hope so.

Anyway the Thinking Haibun challenge can be found here : Thinking Haibun

And this is my response using the prompt Gathering her brows like gathering storm, Nursing her wrath to keep it warm
Robert Burns :

Love Fire by Versace Phuong

Burning pain buried inside for so long, too long it is a raging flame of impossibilities. Questions of ‘what if’ littered my mind with no answers forthcoming to clean up the mess of a life splattered with disaster. Perhaps it is best if I end it, take that final step to oblivion and escape this malignant enchantment. A brief desperate thought as I gaze at her face and the beauty of her sleeping, the beauty of an innocent angel. I feel the warmth of passion brewing within me as once more she feeds my sense of wonder and the pain subsides like liquid sucked into a sponge. At last I drift into that dreamless sleep where everything makes sense and begin to understand.

anger’s flames
burn with a sacred passion
and call it love

© JG Farmer 2014

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About Jez Farmer

I am a freelance writer and poet and started writing after raising my two boys as a way of discovering just who Jez is. That is still very much an on-going project but the journey so far has introduced me to many wonderful friends and fellow writers through an ever growing love of poetry.
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20 Responses to Love Haibun

  1. julespaige says:

    I do enjoy how we play so differently with the same prompt! I think you have captured the essence of haibun very well. Thanks for joining in!

    I played here:
    http://juleslongerstrandsofgems.wordpress.com/2014/01/28/haibun-thinking-liberation/

  2. kerrieanns says:

    I think you nailed it!
    I loved your haibun! 😀

  3. Brenda says:

    Great multimedia journey you took us on. So true that our quiet thoughts while our loved ones are sleeping, are not always quiet.

  4. A wonderful first, Jeremy.

  5. Bastet says:

    Wow…fantastic write!

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  7. Great Haibun Jeremy and welcome to Haibun Thinking, you have done very well for your first go, hope we see you back here in the weeks to come. Fabulous image as well.

  8. Anja says:

    This is a fabulous haibun. Beautifully used words that created strong images. I really enjoyed it!!!

  9. Al says:

    It’s perfect. The way you used the prompt and the image you added to it fit very well. The thoughts in the mind that can only be fixed with sleep. Excellent 🙂 Well done Jeremy.

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